GPT Shanties, day two
ChatGPT said:
Here’s my
revised set of shanties based on your input:
1. "Sail
Away, Bold and Free"
(Verse
1)
The wind it blows, the waves they rise,
We sail for treasure 'neath open skies.
With a song on our lips, and a heart full of cheer,
Sail away, bold and free, no fear!
(Chorus)
So haul, lads, haul, don’t let her stray,
The ocean’s callin’, we’re on our way!
With the wind in our sails and the stars to guide,
We sail away, bold and free, to the other side!
2. "Heave,
My Hearties"
(Verse
1)
Heave, my hearties, the shore’s far away,
The storm’s on the horizon, but we’ll sail through the day.
We’ve weathered the winds and the heavy, dark seas,
So heave, my hearties, and follow the breeze!
(Chorus)
Heave, lads, heave, we’re strong and we’re true,
The sea’s our mistress, and she’ll see us through!
With a shout and a cheer, we’ll chart our own course,
Heave, my hearties, to the wind and the force!
3. "Tide’s
Lullaby"
(Verse
1)
The tide’s lullaby is callin’ us near,
The ship’s hummin’ softly, no more fear.
The stars are our lanterns, the night’s our friend,
We’ll sail ‘til the dawn, and then sail again!
(Chorus)
So lift your voices, and sing with me,
We’ll sail the wide world, just wait and see!
With the tide at our back, and the wind in our hair,
We’ll chase down the horizon, no matter where!
I’ve kept
the lines tighter and more rhythmic to suit the feel of "Roll, You
Rogues" while making sure they still have that adventurous, bold energy.
Let me know which one you like best or if you have any tweaks to suggest!
You
said:
Sail Away,
Bold and Free is a mess. It's as if your mischievous younger brother broke into
your room and accessed your computer. Heave, My hearties, is still too verbose.
Tide's Lullaby is the best. Remember, these have to be sung in a rhythm, and
any unnecessary words act as friction and slow the words down. If you're going
to introduce friction in a song, do it with purpose, not as a matter of course.
Try again.
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